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all this and yet still no Yuri tag

I hate the author for forgetting things for the sake of romance. Whenever the author does it it makes the MC look stupid.
I'm only going to focus on the MC for now so: Whenever something happens and one of the male leads is there MC magically forgets how to use her magic right. For example: jumping from the rooftop on the missions with long-hair-guy. She could have used floating magic but instead screams of fear.
Or her as Snowballen getting exposed as a browns daughter from Cory and the long-hair-guy. She used her signature as barons daughter when Snowballen is a big shot in the magic technology? And didn't expect Cory to know?? That's somehow very questionable and it just makes the MC looks stupid. Cory could have found out by seeing how she uses magic or by how she explained to repair something and it would have been the same effect but rather her not being portrayed as someone stupid enough to use the same signature when knowing who her secret identity is.
But also when she waited in that room and it got hot - what about magic to cool you off, opening the windows or looking why it was hot?? No she just waits and of course gets exposed since she took her cloak off, before the backstabbing and sly male lead she KNEW ABOUT comes to meet her.
Yet somehow her grades and magic knowledge and swordsmanship are fantastic AND she has a shop/guild that she owns? It feels more like the male leads have these strong attributes (Cory in magic, crown prince in swordsmanship, lang-haired-guy in Guild and business) and she just has them to actually have a connection point with the make leads. It doesn't feel like these attributes were made for her as a character for me.

The mc as a character should be so much more fun and interesting to see if she actually would have gotten own attributes and intelligence she seems to have. The author conveniently forgets she has so much with her and is smart just for the sake of romance. This makes the MC look more stupid than she looks and makes me actually stop reading at points because of how weird it is to see her not use something when she clearly can. I really need the author to actually write down what their characters can and use the things even when it's "romantic" for the male leads to save her. Give my girl some smartness when it's needed ಠ︵ಠ

the panel with face in the pussy made me laugh

Why are we hating on a character that didn't do anything bad?
Both of them are moving at live at a different speed. While both might have been hardworking it wouldn't change that both of them had different lifestyles.
The ex decided that there would be no good outcome if they both were romantically involved together any further because of that exact problem.
She never cheated, laughed at him or gaslit him. They both knew the problem and she broke up with respect and honesty.
Of course one would be heartbroken about a breakup, especially if it's someone very deeply loved but that's just normal.
Why are we hating on the ex if she didn't do anything wrong? should she have stayed even though they had different ways of living and that could have become a strong conflict between them??

The ghost will always be hater number 1.

This story feels so forced rn. I don't mean the idea of her finding a husband to escape the obsessive guys but rather the pacing.
The prologue/1st chapter says the main idea of the story but then in the 2nd we switch to a different timeline. No indication that we did that. Then I'm getting confused on what the fuck is happening. After that she somehow remembers that this was a game with minimal information about who she was/what the game was and what will happen or who the female lead in the game was.
The "adopted" daughter is a typical evil sister that tries to manipulate the others to not like her. I like how she isn't stupid asf and adapts to the situation but whenever something happens we get her crying, someone protecting her and then no further fight but rather MC walking away or something else happening until the sister returns and decides to manipulate again.
The brother feels like a wish version of the "I hated you but you're beginning to grow on me" type of brother. He changes his feelings every single chapter with his father being the same.
The world is generic yet we get no information about the history or any other type of world building. And rather than that there are divine beings that curse someone?? And the MC has some kind of special power that she got from somewhere but she should have no power??
The idea was really cool. It would have been interesting to see MC play with the 3 guys and evade them as much as possible while finding her husband. I would have loved it being comedy and showing the dark themes of having obsessed people around you with humour mixed in it.
Yet this feels like a story where the MC cannot do wrong and is smart because she's smart. It feels empty with how little information there is.

Yet the story is such a good one. I love the idea of having her be a player once and forgetting her memory when the sister comes in but remembering them when she almost dies.
It isn't only a nice concept but also a really good way to make the sister mysterious.
I find it confusing what powers the people have and how they're using it but I am please to find magic having a bigger role than just being there and brought up in situations only when needed.
I love the sisters dynamic of maybe being a player herself or obsessed with one of the original male leads while still trying to sabotage the mc that is clueless to her manipulation. For now she is a well written character which I cannot help but like how she is. Although I hate her to the core with what she did to our MC.

overall I like the story a lot. I do hope they find a better pacing on it and rework the consistency of information and thoughts given to the reader. It has a really big potential. I'd love to see if she can pick a husband later on and who it'll be to protect herself from the original male leads.(๑•ㅂ•)و✧
about 8/10

the ending is perfect. We don't need a full arc of her just having therapy and drama to keep us entertained. The story was about their romance which now is stable and save while both of them accepted their problems and try to fix things between eachother. The parents are not another big character story but rather parents that help when needed. The ending explained everything and showed their progress with their emotions and their dreams/wishes and regrets.
overall the story was a mess with huge amount of drama which kept me entertained but often got me out of the story not knowing what was happening. So the ending making it rather fast and the author not deciding on any new drama is nice.

You had me in the first half ngl. Don't so that again.

this is such a slow burn with his character. I liked the story from the beginning when they said the woman was his soulmate sinc eit added a lot of comedy. The evilness of his soul was such a nice breather from every adventure where the guy is just strong and either is the purest form of pure or some kind of solo wolf alpha guy that helps only when necessary or if it helps himself.
But MC is progressing so slow and his character is changing even more slowly that I can't help but feel like rereading this shit and marinating it for now just so I can actually remember his development and not forget it whenever this mahnwa updates.

the art and story feel a lot like 'The ending, I want to change it'. Is it the same author?