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See, this is the issue with expectations. XD
My mind saw the cover and thought I would get a lovely romance and family type situation, but the description tells me it'll be a messy fuckfest that I will not like.

I was really hoping to see something akin to a man getting involved with another, then the man's family decides to basically make the MC the new mom or something.
I'd really love to read that kinda thing right now. Instead, all I can find is dumb smut in the new uploads. ╥﹏╥

I am definitely used to the 'conveniently unalived parents' trope, but this is not the spot we usually jump into the story from. Let's treat the little bean well, okay? ╥﹏╥

Lost me within 1 chapter.
These kinda comics become the norm lately, that's sad.

The setup could have been really interesting but going for the good old fashioned and lazy route of:
- creep approaches
- creep molests MC
- MC says it's disgusting but he randomly gets a hard on like a hentai bitch
- they probably proceed to fuck because of the blackmail

You lost me with that shitty plot route. This has been done a hundred or a thousand times. Predictable, not likable and for anyone not reading to fap to it, just not interesting.

I know I shouldn't expect anything anymore from smut stories, but authors could at least pretend to be better than amateur porn plot writers. Just pretend. A tiny bit. :')

My guess would be the theory of him being the source for the chaos of the world.
If he thrives and creates chaos, it would make sense it has a negative effect on him to recieve love and affection. Maybe even making him vomit.

His strange monologue infront of the mirror is odd tho. So far he didn't seem to be the fake type narcissist.

I think the base story is good but the execution is just really lacking, it feels too random.
Maybe with giving it some more chapters and emotional detail it could have worked. Or maybe by making it more comedy-focused. That could have also shifted the story for the better.
This just felt too random as it is now.

Do like the base idea tho. I think showing an orphan turned criminal and someone who's concerned about them and tries to chase them down to give them a normal life again is a really neat concept. There's plenty of potential with that sorta setup.

TF is wrong with the ex?
Why degrade the lover he's very obviously hooked on, given he immediately came running back.
I don't get why he would call the MC a pig, fat, etc.. He's just not the typical body builder ripped, but he IS build.

I'd honestly love seeing body types like his more: Muscles but also still fat on them to look natural. That looks just WAY more attractive than 0% body fat ripped dudes. ╮(￣▽￣)╭

Never lost interest in a comic so quickly.
That's almost impressive really.

Mild spoilers, skip to last bracket of text to avoid them and get the gist of issues.

The base story is really good, it's much more interesting and pleasant than 90% of the shitty Omegaverse plots we see out there, but at chapter 3 to 4 already things just got WAY too rushed.
Them just getting it on and the villain showing up, making that decision and getting together because suddenly love(?) is a thing, was just way to random, rushed and not well thought out. I mean, he literally went from 'ew, homos are gross!' to 'i wanna be with you no matter what!' within half a chapter basically. It felt like a rough script rather than that being transformed into a story with a flow. Which really ruined it for me. It could have been amazing if it had been given time to develope naturally and at a good pace. :(
I get throwing in the angst of the incest aspect, but that's something I only find non-disgusting BEFORE they fuck and potentially have an inbred baby on the way. So that wasn't exactly a plus point for the story either. XD
The entire human trafficking plot is really interesting and definitely worth spending time on when writing. But even that aspect felt a bit rushed at times, or just jumbled. Not sure tho, as this could be due to how the chapters were uploaded. Some seem to have the pages not quite in correct order.


Don't get me wrong, the writing at it's core and many dialogue/monologue moments are great, but it just didn't get enough time to let the story itself unfold naturally and as smoothly as it could have been.
I would still recommend it, but with there being issues you need to prepare for. Pacing/it being rushed too much, mainly.
The story is interesting and nice, so it depends on how your personal standard for flow and writing is. Some may find it bothersome, others not so much.
I like it for what it is at it's core, tho it could have been much better.
Fingers crossed we'll see more of these non-rape/smut infested Omegaverse stories and actually see comics with an actual PLOT. This one is definetly a good example of how to do it, if we only view the overall story aspect itself.

You know it's time to go to bed when you read "He felt the gays." instead of reading the words written right in front of you. XD

A nice and simple story, no unneeded drama that elongates the story just for the purpose of making it longer, no hate-able characters. Just the good old type of manga that's a nice read. <3

I do think tho that some questions should have been answered since they were hinted at being mysterious or having reason behind them. Such as: Where ML ran off to or why he does that, why he refused the chocolate, if he actually had a female-related trauma because his strong reaction very much suggested that, etc..

I also think this story would have benefitted more from working on actually developing the romance and emotions instead of just going for 'romance because they fuck alot'. I have never liked that sorta stuff, because it makes the romance seem shallow, bland or badly thought out. Often it feels random, which somewhat was the case here too. It just happened from one moment to another, for BOTH of them, just at seperate times. No hint at any big change of feelings for specific reasons we were clearly shown.
Pretty sure the story would have benefitted from being romance focused instead of smut focused. But it is what it is. Still decent enough tho.

I really like the setting of actor co-workers, I am kinda starved for those stories (any recommendations are appreciated btw). So I'm quite happy this story actually used that setup thoroughly instead of just an entrance point. It could have gone even harder into that direction tho, that would have been fun to see. :)

One way or another; a good read without any major grand happenings that elongate the plot. Definetly good when you are looking to spend some time on a casual story for some time in the afternoon, when you want to immerse yourself into another setting for a short time.