
the ml is kinda twisted, would he rather her being a bitch to everyone but him or what? the "cold to everyone but me" trope is just clnditional kindness and isn't actually cute, being kind to only your special one means you're not actually kind and wanting your special one to only be kind to you and being jealous of the recipients of their kindness also makes you a bad person. kindness is a human quality, not a romantic quality

SHE'S 15?! SHE DOESN'T LOOK A DAY OVEER 10 WTF ARE ARTISTS EATING THAT MAKES IT SEEM LIKE ANYONE WOULD LOOK LIKE THAT AT 15 EVEN IF THEY WERE MALNOURISHED

I'm sorry but if she has a plump face but look 5 years younger and it's chucked to malnutrition, it breaks the immersion. you look gaunt when you're not eating enough and she's clearly eating less than beggars and working enough to kill a horse. by her "magical burnc she's supposed to be close to death, but she doesn't look it at all

the way gu fei treat yan yan like a child and yan yan acts like a child from his big 19 years of age, is kinda uncomfortable. like giving him fairytales to read bust still wanting to fuck him? if i was yan yan and i knew that he knew that I'm studying highschool or college level books I'd get offended to be given fairytale books to read while I'm bored sitting around his office bc he wants to keep an eye on me.
gu fei is 27, not 50 and yan yan is 19, not 9. it's almost pedophilic and sure as hell is infantilistic, especially since yan yan has had a bf before and must've done everything boyfriends do
otherwise a cute story
the plot has no substance and i can say the same from every relationship, sex scene and individual character. it's the most stupidest way to write a "the power of the og plot drives us crazy" isekai story and it's so bad it's not even funny, they're all as dumb as the other and this story has no rhyme or reason, no logical thinking and not one person with even a quarter of a brain (even half a brain is too generous a phrasing). it's just an overused, regurgitated plotline used as a device for smut. it's almost a pwp if not for the faint, almost mist like semblance of a storyline.
if those are the people supposed to save the world, trying to do everything all by themselves with the faculties of a babbling toddler, then this world was doomed from the start even if the demon lord and the power of the plot didn't exist.
has the german saying says, bread can rot, what can this story even amount to