On my second thought, I just want to delete this but my efforts — Why did I spend my time writing this again? Forget it, don't rest this damned essay of mine yall. You could use the time to finish reading all the available chapters of this story instead
I'm sorry to say I didn't read your 'essay' except for the first three lines. All in all I take it that you dislike this story. Unfortunately I have to agree that it is lacking. The characters, the build up, and presentation. The story is a pretty interesting plot but the process itself is left unsatisfactory. （￣へ￣）
I am so sorry if my 'essay' was a pain in the eyes mate, but I appreciate that you still read it even if just a bit Your terms are wayyy easier to understand than mine, sryls wtf was I writing- but yes, it is a story that is just straight up dull and time wasting. Thanks for sharing your thoughts (๑•ㅂ•)و✧
Fucking fuck the eyestrain I receive while reading Half of it. Good points as an aspiring author myself I do believe it is lacking in someway. Though to the characters are drawn in a good manner (props to the person who drew them) The story is a little wack
Oh lord I can't believe you really went on half of my essay mate I appreciate that you took your time on sharing your thoughts there(๑•ㅂ•)و✧
No problem actually, I’m Finna put this shit on Google translate so she can read it out to me
Omg PLEASE NO I've experienced like three embarrassment today out of my stupidity, not my damned long ass words mate
Asghhfddfgh I just finished it and actually thank you for not going full swing on the author-nim and complementing Art work and etc at the end. Lol my old English Teacher could never. Also like that you gave the message of letting them grow to learn more, even if people didn’t read to the end.
Omg you actually did it fr!!? I appreciate it though That's like one of the biggest compliment I've ever received sryls! Dang whatsup w my luck today- I sryls feel the happiest when people compliment something that is unintentionally or little things about me. Sryls thanksss omg;-;
Lol No problem made my night A little brighter
You brought up good points but you still get 40% thumb down. None of those (so far) gave you any reasons why they did so. I think rather than they disagree, they agree but they just dont like when someone say something negative about what they like. It’s narrow minded.
I noticed, but didn't actually though of it that way. I just thought like, oh maybe the sight of my long 'essay' just hurts their eyes LOL but that'd still be possible I guess
I didn't expect that to send by itself, I wasn't even finished istg! Anyhow, thanks for sharing your thoughts of the little things of my topic TT And I appreciate you for reading my reviews oml-
Not really. I’ve been in this website for too long and seen people’s behaviors here. I’m a person who don’t sugarcoat my words but I try not to be harsh with words. When I don’t like something I’ll say why and reasons why I don’t like it. I would be thumbed down to oblivion and got replies on why I was wrong or how my opinion isn’t necessary (unless it’s a praise).
I LOVE your straightforwardness bro, surely we're two different people working our ways in life differently, but it's not a bad change of pace to accept and take in other's opinion ay. I do get realistic in things, but I tend to view things positively when it comes to things that are just... Unknown. And well that's because I haven't been using this site for long like you ofc, not so much experience w different people here So I appreciate the genuine gesture of telling me about their behaviour mate
About the essay...I read it to the end. Why? Because as a reader I am pushing myself to keep up with this story in the hope it gets better.
But I didn't know exactly WHAT was putting me off. The characters aren't bad, the art is good, the plot is interesting, but somehow it wasn't working for me. After you pointed out that it was impossible to guess which characters were important, the flow of events is rough and confusing I finally get what.
I'm glad that my uhm, essay of a reviews-something helped you in someway! Also, I totally appreciate w the fact that you actually read it till the end..tyyyy
very good comment. I agree. Story idea and character idea is full of potential but everything else is very lacking. This isnt hate, its fact/review to give author the idea of what to work on. If they cant fill it up themself they can look for help of someone that is more professional and has more expirience. Its good to criticize writers with good intention, as one i love it when other people share their opinions because it makes me more open minded and shows me different sides that i may have not seen or forgot about.
Dont be too hard on your essay because you said everything that needs to be said and gave reasons why.
I appreciate :>
It might be petty from me but I had to say it... I don't think we, illegal readers, really have a right to expect author to improve with our "reviews". I've got no problem with negative critics, good or bad, we all have things we want to say but... Don't justify it saying its for the author, if it was, none of us would be here
Pfft-, just swallowed us and spit us right back out
Hello to y'all fellow new readers :D Now, how should I say this... I am a new reader myself today — Well, now it has degraded to 'was' instead. Let's go through one by one of why this story is something I personally would recommend only after my dead body...
The dynamics ack —— Author nim couldn't torture me enough on that one. As a writer and books reviewer myself, no matter the form of story; regardless if it's written as a novel, webcomic or an animation — I can say that nothing will cover up this poor dynamics sadly... (That's how bad it is —) It's awfully inconsistent my friends :'D I can't even tell which character is important because of the inconsistent screen time each character holds. Then as if that wasn't bad enough, the way the author just jumps from one scenario to another resembles the act of dumping a whole bricks leading the readers towards their planned paths 'roughly'.
Take in the idea of; you were reading and trying to comprehend just what in the world is the summary of the chapter you just read, then the author straight up cut the chapter w a rough cliffhanger. It couldn't get any better when the author started the next chapter w a whole different scenario that you literally forgot it was even mentioned to occur two three chapters ago, I — Let's just end that w a star off there...
Now w the manuscript writing... The character information the author write is seriously... Before the idea kills me entirely, just who in the who is — No, rather how do these characters w useless characteristics deserves a whole 10 panels of them getting mentioned into the story — When the important characters the readers desperately needed their introduction and glimpse of back stories only have like 3 panels of their explanatory! Then the story just continues on as if the readers has figured it all out on who and how important their roles are.
I'd like to go on for the sake of the new readers' mental preparation, but as if the idea of me writing a whole criticizing reviews instead of writing my English essay — wasn't shameful enough, *cough cough*.
T o c o n c l u d e , it's dull, confusing and time wasting. If any of you are going against me w a "just let author write however they want —" Hey, not when I've finally found the purposes of my living mate. If you're going to let authors continue writing such poor stories (this applies to any author w poor writings), I can't imagine the future of storytelling mate :D Literally the main purpose of a reviewer is for the author to improve their storytelling regardless forms. Don't hesitate to speak your opinions nor get biased just because something is your favorite genre. You deserve some good reading experiences. But give also give those authors a chance to improve obviously. Even though this story lacks dynamics and manuscript writing, the art is worthwhile. So are the great plot ideas. Though I, personally will no longer be staying for some writing improvements. Just — prepare y'all mentality for the early chapters