It bothers me, just a nitpick, that Shingun didn’t figure out Jake’s identity on his own. There were several conversations about Shingun trying to put them on similar levels information wise, showed multiple scenes with his informant contact, built up the hackers getting serious on his side, all for the revelation to be given to him. Like Jake’s identity just stares him in the face, it’s nothing HE does to figure it out. It’s all circumstance.
I like Shingun, I do, definitely one of my favorite BL MC’s, but… he doesn’t beat the typical damsel in distress allegations. He always needs saving in the end and he never even gets close to equal footing as Jake. This is just my one nitpick in the story. Doesn’t ruin it for me, just wish this one element could have been addressed or handled better.
They’re going to do something when it’s time for him to be released that extends his time. Hopefully that’s enough for him to snap, even better if it’s timed with him learning they set up the whole gang rape scenario that got him to accept their deal in the first place. There’s no way Uke isn’t going to try to kill himself at least once.
Being the single parent to a manchild is draining, there’s no way the uke holds out longer than 6 months.
He could have thought up to save her, he landed on “I have to rape the woman I love multiple times and tell her nothing.” Like, yeah okay buddy, I’m sure that’s the ONLY WAY she could have been saved. The way that lets you sleep with the person you’ve wanted for multiple lifetimes now. How convenient.
If the vampire really did kill a CHILD in the beginning, then the author has done a good job making it so a lot of readers won’t care how horribly he’s treated in future chapters. If it’s never brought up again I’ll assume the child died, but there’s still room to see. But if he did then, my dislike of rape in stories suddenly vanishes when it’s happening to a child murderer. A purely fictional narrative take.
With the abuse escalating as it was and ML being know to murder for fun… we all know within a year or so he’s likely going to kill MC. Probably during sex gone too far. Like there is only 1 way this ends for MC now and it’s with a premature death.
My problem is this was just 7 chapters of watching a guy get tortured. It ends where it began. So you read chapter 1 and you’ve basically gotten the entire experience, which I think is a failure of writing. This isn’t psychological or horror, it’s actual, literal, by definition torture porn. Which fine if that’s your kink, I just think writing wise this was poorly executed and a waste of time.
The rape in the beginning ruins the whole thing. And it was SO unnecessary. It’s never brought up again, there are no consequences. Like it just happens and the story moves on. It’s treating rape like a rough handshake. But it ruins the “sweet” ML everyone loves because it means at his core he’s a rapist who sees nothing wrong with rape. Why do yaoi always do this with ML they don’t want to be seen as evil? Like unless you’re intentionally writing a toxic ML who is meant to be toxic and that’s a plot point of the story, why rape? Just feels like the editor said “we need a sex scene in the beginning” so they just threw it in to get it out of the way.
That the boss being a shit boss who oversteps bounds and abuses his authority to make secretary do jobs outside of his duties, even so far as taking care of the boss at home, gets brought up. Very worried they’re going to skip over the abuse of power and go straight to the secretary doing damage control bc he was caught planning to (kind of dropped) backstab said awful boss. Got my finger crossed bc if the secretary is the only one who has to apologize I’ll consider this a flop story wise (but still great smut).
About a man who is gaslit by everyone around him to think he’s wrong and crazy as his autonomy is slowly stripped away. Mother sells you to the royal family, collects checks you’ve never seen a scent of, and lies about your gender? It was for your own good and you’re ungrateful. What do you mean not knowing put you at risk? THAT’s why the royal family said they would protect you… from the harm and media storm THEY cause. He’s obviously not being rational about this.
He wants to stay in college and not get pregnant? Is he crazy? That’s a selfish thing to do, he’s not even thinking about how that would make the fiancé he just met feel or the danger he would be in… because of the lies and said fiancé. He’s clearly not thinking rational since becoming an omega. Hopefully spousal training, preparing him for his wifely duties will set him straight.
For now he can be indulged and allowed to go to college. Just until he gets pregnant of course, which will be soon obviously. What a crazy guy, not even considering how his fiancé feels about him getting an education or that could impact his true future career. Baby maker.
The art is so sketchy and unfinished I wondered if this was a beta test before the official release.
This art shows that if you want to make a webcomic, just do it. Not good at art or comic paneling? Doesn’t matter. The only thing stopping you is YOU. Who needs talent when you have ~passion~
If the FL had an ounce of agency or personality. She doesn’t do anything the entire story except exist and have sex. She gets an incredible power and does nothing with it. Instead of her “writing her own story” it’s used as a quick and easy way to fix the relationship between her and the ML. Like, she didn’t even try to use it that way on her own, it just happened. The only interesting thing she’s ever done was the backstory where she saved ML as a child. But then we see none of that bravery or even quick wit later. Just a let down. She could be replaced with a very sweet pet and nothing but the sex would change.
Usagi Otoko Tora Otoko. They have similar premises, but I like the art and comedy of Usagi over this one. Also I think it does a better job with balancing the yakuza concept with a normal person. It’s not perfect but I recommend checking it out if you like yakuza x doctor who saved their life premise.
They really tricked me in the beginning into thinking the MC would have a backbone and be self sufficient and cool. First responder lycan who is strong, brave, and won’t let a past, failed love walk all over him? NO. Just another damsel in distress doormat. Boy, do I feel like a fool.
If ML had met another 1/1 Haram that reminded him more of his imaginary friend, not just a blond, he never would have went back to uke. Felt less like he genuinely loves uke and more like he slowly realized uke was the closest he was going to get to his fantasy. And since he loves his imaginary friend he must “love” the closest thing available. It’s too wrapped in delusion to feel genuine.
Just feels like they went back to the start. ML’s toxic mindset in the epilogue, testing uke’s affection by seeing how far he can push him during sex, doesn’t help. Unfortunately this story fell into the same pitfall as many other BL where sex takes precedence over story. Hence why even after the breakup they continued having sex, because heaven forbid we go more than 5 chapters in this psychological drama without a smut scene. I can see why some people might like this, but it just fell short and was unsatisfying for me.
They’re dating. They like each other. There was NO reason for ML to rape the MC? It came out of nowhere and was glossed over to a degree that it didn’t need to be there at all. Also, MC is not the kind of guy who would so easily forgive RAPE after a single pouty look from ML. Even ignoring the overuse of rape as a cheap way to have 2 characters bang without needing to build chemistry… this story DID build chemistry and it just doesn’t work narratively after the growth of MC and even ML. It’s bad writing.
This is like if the author read Okane Ga Nai and felt inspired~ like the character dynamic AND wonky sizes have the same vibe, even the uke’s prepubescent femme design is similar. Tho they somehow wrote a worse seme than Kanou (not an easy task)
Really want to get into this, 20 chapters in. But the FL is so stupid it’s haaaard. She knows her brother KILLED her in her previous life, plotted the war. She does absolutely nothing with this information after coming back to life. She doesn’t put eyes on him, doesn’t make sure she knows of the secret meetings with other kingdoms. Doesn’t try to find out who the mage who helped kill her was. Doesn’t do anything toward him to put herself in a better position information or power wise. Yet she’s FAR more distrustful to Canach who only went to war after she was killed. Like, her entire plan, for 20 years. Was just… hope her brother doesn’t kill her this time? Because she has magic she used for border walls. Marry the same man with 0 planning ahead and hope for the best? All that build up for her to have NO plan. That was a wasted 20 years.
The comments hype her up but I’m just not seeing it.
