ReviewRaptor's manga / #LACKING(493)

Aaaaand another one for the list of: Good art wasted on shit story. Why do all these good artists have either bad taste or no self-esteem/value when they associate their art to shitty plots? That's quite the mystery considering artists are usually careful not to get a bad image. Guess dumb BL smut comic artists are different. ╮(￣ へ￣)╭

The main story is honestly something I'd like to see more often. It's a really adorable concept and gives room for lots of story options! As for the writing, it's a bit too neglected in the falling-in-love corner of things, because that somehow just happened from one moment to the next without any explaination, which made my personal score a little lower for it than it could have been with extra effort in that part of the story. The second story is also really great! With this one the falling in love had already happened but it makes sense and doesn't need explaining. And seeing them work it out, with all the comedic moments and cute chibi art is just nice. <3 A very adorable couple and character dynamic, can't get enough of seeing this type tbh. The last story (chapter 5) is honestly weird. Nevermind the age gap, this story too just jumps from 'no feelings (apparently anyway)' to 'here is a marriage proposal'. There was not a hint of any actual romance going on. Granted, it was a oneshot, but even so there was opportunity to showcase the odd romance going on. It just felt random. Not to mention weird, considering the age gap and IF they both wanted to marry each other, it would mean both had feelings for the other previously (so pre-15 year old character B). And I suppose most can agree that's not exactly a story people like. I know it's different in asia, but still: be warned that this is likely worth skipping if you don't care for seeing a 15 year old X 25(?) year old in a random romance happenstance thingy. Would highly recommend this comic! But again, likely skip the last if you aren't into the age gap thing going on there and prefer good writing. ╮(￣▽￣)╭

First of all, the art is great and the overall writing nice, but the core story and character relationship is really dumb at best and nonsensical at least. This is one of those stories that is just nonsensical to me because what they are isn't people in love but rather just fuck buddies who got the weird eureka moment to call themselves a couple/lovers, despite that not being the relationship they have. They like fucking and that's it. Which means: if any of them DO meet a person they actually fall for, this relationship goes to shit faster than you and I can blink. Turning them, basically, into the shitty ex/untrustworthy player character of other stories that we all hate. XD If at least the writing was done in a way to indicate they actually fell for each other, it would change things, but what little 'feelings' there are are either made by horniness or feel incredibly shoehorned at best. It just doesn't feel anything but shallow. And again; a weird choice to decide to 'date' when that isn't really what they should be doing. The art is nice, has funny moments and lots of fap material I suppose, but the story in terms of romance is really just non existent if we look at it in detail and not through the lense of reading a BL comic, so the characters MUST love each other per default. Not my thing, tho the art is great. Check it out i guess but I honestly wouldn't recommend it because of the 'romance' in it. If you're just looking for dudes bonking and being weird and kinda dumb, this might be your jam tho.

I know I shouldn't judge it based on this alone but...the anatomy of this is ALL over not just one place, but all the places. It makes this equally as unpleasant to read as the story itself. Or maybe even more if I'm honest. There is neither consistency nor quality control and sometimes some panels look either like multiple people worked on the art or some panels are heavily referenced or even traced from something else (one kissing panel and some feet come to mind here). Not gonna waste my time with this and I can't recommend this to anyone either.

The story is really interesting, something new and realistic tbh since this could so easily happen irl (needing to break a language barrier, etc.). The characters feel realistic but due to the rather quick, not to say rushed, plot they all feel a little too shallow or shoehorned here and there. You just don't get to know them as well and info finds no time to settle since the next happening is immediately there to keep you busy. This story could have done better with 5 to 10 chapters instead. Getting to know each person more, etc.. It would also have helped the emotional immersion, let's call it. Even the ML crying did not have the heavy impact it could have had if the build up was done better by letting the story work with emotions and immersion some more. Which can really only be done by giving it more time. It is still a good read tho, despite being so quick. It doesn't feel rushed like we usually see in actually rushed plot stories, which I find odd. Can't put my finger on why. Tho this is definitely pointing towards the writing ability of this author being good, I'd dare say. The art might need some getting used to due to the style, similar to stuff like Haikyuu!! does, but it's really nicely drawn with lots of detail and effort. :) Worth a read if you're looking for something different and quick to read. So give it a go. ^^

My review: https://www.mangago.me/home/mangatopic/19218587/

Not a fan of the writing of this one. The start of the story is entirely jumbled, feeling as if you read chapters inbetween chapters and after missing a whole bunch that give you literally ANY info. To the characters, the setting, etc.. It's just info after info getting thrown at you, as if you should already know who the person is or have read their back story. Which doesn't seem to be the case given there is only a sequel listed on MU. Just not a fan of this type of writing that just bombards you with info and you're left to just take it. The overall story is interesting but people who prefer a good flow of story without being left to wonder here and there might not exactly enjoy it. Give it a go, but be warned that there are issues with the flow of the story.

My review: https://www.mangago.me/home/mangatopic/19250815/ I keep coming back to this comic every now and then and I still keep thinkin gwhat an unpolished gem this is. It feels VERY rough draft-ish and feels all in all very unfinished. BUT. What we DO get to see is incredibly interesting. All characters and the humor is amazing and the strong story that is there is so heavy and begs for a long format re-work! It's truly wasted potential given this was left in a rough state. But as a writer, I somewhat get it. Sometimes you just don't have enough ideas to make the heavy plot perfect, so you shelf it. But sometimes what you have is just too dear to NOT put down on paper. That's what I think this comic is. It's what it reads as to a T. All in all it's not a satisfying read because of the unfinished and unpolished feeling to it, but I wouldn't wanna miss it. It's a great snippet of a grand story. And at leats I can use it as material to daydream a perfect 'full version' to my personal tailoring. Which is what I suggest everybody else does too. Worth a read but be warned about the things I mentioned up above. It's good but unpolished to a high degree. View it as a rough draft of a shelved story that was just too good to be left untold in at leats the basics. These can be fun to read in their own ways tbh, Iberico being a good example. :)