ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(264)

Don't bother reading this. This is absolute wasted potential. The base story is really interesting, the boy being abused and wanting to leave by any means and the cruel prince that takes an interest in him because he's different. But the plot is entirely ruined by going for literally bloody rape, just 'cause. This could have been SO good if the author had went with a plot that had the ML be intrigued because the boy is so fearless and naive or just boldly speaks what he's asked. But no, we are going the shitty route of rape. Usually I can excuse the use of this shitty, low hanging fruit troop for bad writers. But this was just lazy and unnecessary. Going for an actual story instead of making this a typical smut fuckfest by any means and without care completely ruined it. It was nice for 3 chapters and then went to shit. So I'm not gonna waste my time with this even if the art is decent. I'd rather write my own version of this story than read this and hope for a sliver of better writing or let alone REASON for the ML. Just nope. This is only fap material for people with a questionable version of a rape kink and that ain't for me. So you do you, but I'm out.

Whoever is actually reading this shit because they find this fap-worthy: Please go get therapy, institutionalized or take your meds.

I just started reading and I have to say: Somehow the writing feels very strange. The character behavior feels quite inconsistent, random at times even and the affection from the MC towards the ML seems rather forced or random as well. As if the author didn't quite know how to make the transition to the next step they had put in the script of this story. Both characters aren't really likable or dislikable per se, so I'm not sure if this'll be interesting on the long run. It just feels off in quite a few ways and doesn't really have that hook factor as much as I thought it could have. I'll give it some more chapters but so far I'm not really at the point to add it to my 'Reading' list to get updates. I hope it gets better tho. XD EDIT: Dropped. The inconsistent and weird or even random behavior just annoys me. To top it off the author basically excuses all bad behavior from the ML with 'oh my, he touched my fingie! *turns into blushy shoujo maiden and acts friendly*'. This is just lackluster writing. r/im14andthisisdeep type stuff. :/

It was fine until he got caught from slipping at random and then ran away, had a hard on and jacked off while fingering himself. That was just weird and random.

The art AND writing feels lackluster, rushed, random and honestly like a young teen wrote it. The romance is rushed and random, weird really. And the art is mid and very inconsistent. The base story is interesting, especially since the ML isn't your typical rapey jackass Alpha (yet), but I honestly cannot feel immersed in this. I keep loosing interest AS I read. Mainly because the MC has such an utterly obnoxious literal toddler type behavior, ALL THE TIME. XD Probably a real good read for younger people, but not for mature readers with sense of quality, pacing and whatnot. ________________ This story really is an odd mix of sweet romance and obnoxious toddler-adult MC cringe. Which is why it's so hard to commit to reading OR dropping. Because one aspect is really making me want to see the romance, but the other (the literal toddler-type MC personality) really makes me just fed up because he is extremely unappealing to me. Having this odd mix is a first and it's honestly impressive to see. That might just be a talent in and of itself; mangaing to have people be torn inbetween decisions. Kudos to the writer for that. XD But the writing is decent and the comedic moments are great. Which is why I think this could make for a great adio drama or even an anime! The writing is honestly very cringey at times tho. Like that absolute wtf moment which I hope was a mistranslation or made up one at the early chapters: If you can cum it's love. And that wasn't even said as a joke in the moment. WTF? That threw me off into another zipcode. (⊙ ▽⊙ ) I honestly don't know what to say about this as it's such an inbetween thing for me. It's neither fully likable nor dislikable. Which is a first honestly. But I think if people, for some reason, like the MC acting like a literal child 24/7 and want to see their romance and drama unfold, this is likely an absolute amazing read. I for one really do not like the MCs personality tho, so I cannot fully enjoy it.

Review: Self-insert fap material, but shitty as a romance story.

This is basically a mutilated version of a detailed novel plot, that's incredibly obvious. But as soon as they throw the random supernatural/fantasy stuff at you, it just becomes more weird, more lackluster and badly planned. It's just a mess. They cut so much info out that was important that it's honestly not pleasant to read. Which is the one thing people shouldn't do if they want to adapt a novel or such into a comic. You have to have a sense of what is needed to give as info and what can be left out. But in this comic someone very clearly didn't know that having a rough script of interesting moments does NOT make for a cohesive and immersive story. And that's a shame. The base story is interesting before it turnes to crap, same with the characters goign from likable to dislikable. I hope this will get a re-do or someone makes a copycat plot that is actually good, but this comic itself is just random, not cohesive and is no fun to read. Mainly because you are basically reading someone's randomly remembered plot retelling, turned into a comic. There is just no flow and no info given, they just hurl things at you and you're left to just deal with that. Not a good read at all. Disappointing on many fronts tbh. And a waste of a really interesting story I would have loved to read in full detail. :(