ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(264)

Lost me within 1 chapter. These kinda comics become the norm lately, that's sad. The setup could have been really interesting but going for the good old fashioned and lazy route of: - creep approaches - creep molests MC - MC says it's disgusting but he randomly gets a hard on like a hentai bitch - they probably proceed to fuck because of the blackmail You lost me with that shitty plot route. This has been done a hundred or a thousand times. Predictable, not likable and for anyone not reading to fap to it, just not interesting. I know I shouldn't expect anything anymore from smut stories, but authors could at least pretend to be better than amateur porn plot writers. Just pretend. A tiny bit. :')

The writing of this feels really off. I could forgive the very obnoxious back and forth from past to present and rinse and repeat, over and over and OVER (without getting to the point in a good manner), but even that becomes unforgivable since it drags on for so long. What bothers me most is the absolute misuse of that AND the miscommunication trope tho. As well as the character behavior: Both of them come across like acting to create a specific moment rather than a moment happening due to them behaving as the person they are. If that makes sense? It feels forced, shoe-horned and random at times even. As if the script didn't think through how to get to the next happening, but we had to get there, so we'll just force it within moments. Both the MC and the ML have personalities that seem bland, again, as if their behavior is rooted in creating the next happening rather than a flowing and cohesive personality. It's just strange. Tho the back and forth without getting anywhere and the annoying misunderstandings really does not help get a real feel for their actual perosnality. It's an interesting story at the core, but the execution is anything but good. And I am certainly not a fan of the main plot basically being miscommunication/misunderstandings galore in and of itself, everything around is basically just a garnish. Not really my thing due to these issues just overstaying their welcome WAY too much. But maybe you can enjoy it. The art is decent, tho I noticed the artist has an issue with not being able to portray some expressions. But i know people can forgive that easily. Check it out, give it a try. It's too annoying for my taste, but maybe you won't mind.

I was really hyped to not only see a bearded ML but also one that wasn't a jackass or had rape-y tendecies. Then chapter 7 rolled in and that went out the window. Felt honestly like someone entirely different wrote that chapter, since it didn't align with his precious behavior at all. Not my thing, lost all interest honestly. But maybe someone else can have a blast with it. ╮(￣▽￣)╭

The art is off, the dialogue is off and the ML is NOT appealing since he's falling almost down into Uncanny Valley. XD

Even the official translation is lackluster in terms of grammar and feels off. The ML is either mental or just weirdly written; his reason for falling in love was literally him realizing the MC is a mega-idiot/ultra-doormat and then he just kissed him and apparently borderline stalked him. The MC is not a character, he's a parody-type tool at best; written in a way that furthers the story rather than behaving like a person with a set personality. The ML's weird, almost creepy obsessive and nonchalant behavior gives major sociopath vibes. Which also goes well with his weird reason for falling in love/immediately kissing the MC out of nowhere. The overall comic cuts out WAY too much, not as annoyingly badly as most webtoons, but it still makes the characters feel shallow, lacking detail and it takes away from the immersion. It's all in all very lacklusterly and shittily done. Not sure why people hype this, but it's not well done. Maybe the novel (if there is one) is better, but even then the ML might feel like a sociopathic freak. Not appealing. Not recommended. Unless you have mid to low writing standards I guess.

Not gonna read further than the MC pissing himself, the ML raping him and then making fun of him when he pukes. Besides threatening him and all that. Sorry, I have standards for at least something pleasant in the beginning. This ain't it.

Aaaaand another one for the list of: Good art wasted on shit story. Why do all these good artists have either bad taste or no self-esteem/value when they associate their art to shitty plots? That's quite the mystery considering artists are usually careful not to get a bad image. Guess dumb BL smut comic artists are different. ╮(￣ へ￣)╭

My review: https://www.mangago.me/home/mangatopic/19070082/ The story itself as a base setup is EXACTLY what I always wanted, but it having such creepy, nonsensical and quite frankly rape-y aspects to it make it more of a dissapointment than me screaming with joy. That made it meh, because this is literally the exact same nonsense as a typical smut hentai: abandoning all reason because the MC randomly feels good and then becomes an obedient cocksleeve. XD Great fap material. Great disappointment for those who hoped for something like a romance even in a very small way. The art is really great btw, some really interesting poses, angles and so on. Could have done without the dumb smut ahega-ho faces tho. Give it a try, but don't expect more than just fucking. Because that's all it is. Sadly.