ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(264)

First of all, the art is great and the overall writing nice, but the core story and character relationship is really dumb at best and nonsensical at least. This is one of those stories that is just nonsensical to me because what they are isn't people in love but rather just fuck buddies who got the weird eureka moment to call themselves a couple/lovers, despite that not being the relationship they have. They like fucking and that's it. Which means: if any of them DO meet a person they actually fall for, this relationship goes to shit faster than you and I can blink. Turning them, basically, into the shitty ex/untrustworthy player character of other stories that we all hate. XD If at least the writing was done in a way to indicate they actually fell for each other, it would change things, but what little 'feelings' there are are either made by horniness or feel incredibly shoehorned at best. It just doesn't feel anything but shallow. And again; a weird choice to decide to 'date' when that isn't really what they should be doing. The art is nice, has funny moments and lots of fap material I suppose, but the story in terms of romance is really just non existent if we look at it in detail and not through the lense of reading a BL comic, so the characters MUST love each other per default. Not my thing, tho the art is great. Check it out i guess but I honestly wouldn't recommend it because of the 'romance' in it. If you're just looking for dudes bonking and being weird and kinda dumb, this might be your jam tho.

I know I shouldn't judge it based on this alone but...the anatomy of this is ALL over not just one place, but all the places. It makes this equally as unpleasant to read as the story itself. Or maybe even more if I'm honest. There is neither consistency nor quality control and sometimes some panels look either like multiple people worked on the art or some panels are heavily referenced or even traced from something else (one kissing panel and some feet come to mind here). Not gonna waste my time with this and I can't recommend this to anyone either.

Not a fan of the writing of this one. The start of the story is entirely jumbled, feeling as if you read chapters inbetween chapters and after missing a whole bunch that give you literally ANY info. To the characters, the setting, etc.. It's just info after info getting thrown at you, as if you should already know who the person is or have read their back story. Which doesn't seem to be the case given there is only a sequel listed on MU. Just not a fan of this type of writing that just bombards you with info and you're left to just take it. The overall story is interesting but people who prefer a good flow of story without being left to wonder here and there might not exactly enjoy it. Give it a go, but be warned that there are issues with the flow of the story.

My review: https://www.mangago.me/home/mangatopic/19269270/ 1st paragraph = Opinion and observation of 1st story 2nd paragraph = review of 2nd story I know Tsuda is supposed to be portrayed as a dense motherfucker of a seme, but he seems WILLFULLY stupid at many times. This is what makes him so obnoxious. If the translations aren't off, he really isn't a well-written character in terms of a steady baseline behavior. He's just not likable. I'm skipping the entire volume thanks to him and the general writing issues here and there (jumping around in point of view, skipping happneings a character started and not coming back to it/leaving it dealt with lukewarm, etc.). He just makes reading a chore and the writing is somehow unappealing. So I have no idea and no interest tbh if the writing or such changes for the better. So keep that in mind. Granted, the entire story is basically just a big back and forth misunderstanding + dragging it out trope mixture, so that too is NOT a likable setup and worth skipping for those that are fed up with this nonsense. Which I sure am after nearly 2 decades of seeing this be done in the BL industry. (〜￣△￣)〜 The second couple is MUCH more likable. Especially Saeki. Yet again proving the fact some side couples should have been the main focus instead. Even just the way the story starts is done so much better. The writing seems to have a way different flow and seems more cohesive in a way. Which makes me wonder why the first story was such a weird mess. The romance is a bit of the stereotypical, simple kind but it's still done well and not as random as I thought it'd be. Still has a bit of writing issues in a tiny manner here and there but it's decently done. And despite being somewhat stereotypical in terms of 'sudden love' plot devices being used, it's an enjoyable read.